Monday, 24 November 2008

How To Critique: A not-at-all definitive guide

Happy Monday to all - and what better way to start the week than with another essay from Jason Pettus. This week he tackles the all-important subject of reviewing.

As members already know, one of the key aspects of authonomy is the writing of book critiques; this is mostly what authonomy is about in the first place, after all, unpublished writers rating and reviewing the work of other unpublished writers, with the top results every month being "kicked upstairs" to editors at HarperCollins to look at, and with peer critiques being written all the time in an effort to influence those ratings (and God forbid, to actually help out one's fellow writers a little). And in fact this is one of the more common complaints about the service as well, that most members seem more interested in manipulating book ratings than in delivering substantial notes to other authors, leading to a system that is long on submissions but short on feedback. But you know what they say, that you reap what you sow; or in other words, if authors wish to receive more feedback about their books, the absolute best way to assure so is to start by critiquing others' books on a regular basis, a fact that several members have now asked if I could point out here sometime, as well as pass along any tips I might have on efficient reviewing of full-length narrative novels. I'm an authonomy member myself*, after all, and also write around 125 reviews each year of finished books over at my arts center's website; and so since several people have asked, I thought I'd indeed devote some time today on detailing how exactly I do such reviews myself, and how other members can hopefully add some quick and easy elements to their own critiques, to make them both better in quality and more helpful to the authors in question.

So first, let's address right away the issue that seems to give so many reviewers problems here, which is how to handle the pacing of a three-act storyline told over the course of an entire full-length book. Because let's not forget, even though you will probably only read 10,000 to 20,000 words of any random submission here, in relative terms that's only 10 to 30 percent of the entire story! It's tempting to judge a title here on short-story terms, when you're only reading a short story's worth of the manuscript; but never forget that the part you most likely read (the beginning, that is) consists almost entirely of setup, exposition and character definition, and is not reflective of the pace once more of the action starts kicking in. But that said, it's also true what literary agent Noah Lukeman says in his industry guide The First Five Pages: that the quality of writing in any particular book will almost never under any circumstances get any better than what's on display in the first chapter; and that if you think the writing itself is lousy at that point, there's almost no chance of it somehow becoming miraculously brilliant two-thirds of the way in. It's a balancing act that a critic must perform with unfinished books or ones not fully read, between not rushing a naturally unfolding storyline in one's head while still being able to recognize the overall quality of the writing itself.

So that said, what's the best way of sitting down and formally judging the quality of a book, anyway? Well, in my case, I start by watching for what most consider the three pillars of Western narrative fiction:

--Does it tell an interesting and well-paced story?
--Are the characters complex, compelling and realistic?
--Does the author tell the story in an engaging and unique style?

Of course, how a person interprets these questions can vary wildly; to cite just one well-known example, some readers enjoy a more erudite writing style that contains bigger words and poetically constructed passages, while others prefer a much more stripped-down writing style, containing smaller words and paragraphs that don't cause undue attention to themselves. This is part of your job as a reviewer, is to establish where your opinion lies with all of these issues; and that's part of an author's job when analyzing such criticism too, of going through a critic's other reviews and understanding where they're coming from with their opinions, whether that's the same or opposite place than the author themselves. In general, though, I think when it comes to nice, simple, informative book critiques, a person could do a lot worse than to mostly concentrate on these three proven fundamentals in literature, and to base one's review mostly on how well or badly that author handled them.

Of course, because of the special nature of authonomy in particular, there are other more special issues as well to be considered in book reviews here: for example, just how commercially viable is the concept for that book, and how easy or hard of a sell would it be to the general public? This is an issue I never tackle with finished books at my arts center, frankly; but with all the manuscripts at authonomy being unsigned ones, and all the authors deliberately trying to come to the attention of paid editors at a mainstream publishing company, a title's commercial appeal is not only a relevant detail in these cases but something I'm sure a lot of writers would appreciate some feedback concerning. And in fact, there are a whole plethora of specific details that one could add to an authonomy review if they wanted, not necessarily appropriate for a lit-crit magazine but certainly the kind of stuff an unpublished writer would appreciate hearing about: Is it too long a story? Too short? Does it seem too slow at places and too fast at others? Are there elements that could potentially offend some audience members without the author having realized it yet? Is it full of pop-culture references you don't get? Regional slang you don't understand? Did the sex scenes make you giggle uncontrollably when they were meant to turn you on?

All of these kinds of details are appropriate for a critique of an unpublished book, especially when the author is doing something like posting it publicly and specifically asking for feedback; although I don't think every review needs to contain such a high level of detail, my main point is the same as these members who have written to me on the subject, that any of this stuff is better than the usual "it was great" or "I loved it." In order to make a critique both useful and influential, it must be both specific and backed by rational arguments; and as long as you're not deliberately being mean or cruel, as long as your comments are more about making things better than simply pointing out weaknesses, I've found that most serious writers will actually welcome such honest feedback, not resent you for it. Do this on a regular basis, the theory goes, and the sheer quality of your feedback will drive people to your own book, just to see if you write fiction as well as you do critiques; and that's the real way to bring legitimate and deep attention to your title here, not through friendship ponzi schemes and other examples of "gaming the system."

As always, I welcome your comments and dissenting opinions below; and if you have a subject you'd like to see tackled here in the future, by all means drop me a line directly at ilikejason [at] gmail.com. Happy reading!

*And let me apologize, by the way, for being out of the critiquing habit here myself for such a long time; for those who don't know, my arts center finally released its first-ever original book earlier this fall, after which I promptly became obsessed with the US Presidential election, just like most of my fellow citizens. Now that both of those things are finished, I look forward to becoming a daily critic of submissions here once again.

(Jason Pettus is the owner of the Chicago Center for Literature and Photography [cclapcenter.com].)

19 comments:

Anne Lyken-Garner said...

So now I'm putting two and two together. I've seen your comments here and there on Authonomy, and only this morning, left you a comment on your message page to say that I arrived there on the merit of your comments, hoping to read your masterpiece.

(Didn't find one.)

Only until I read this, did I realise that you're the same person whose blog I read before.

(It takes a while for some duds to GET things...)

I especially liked what you said about writers appreciating constructive critism. I could never understand why some people on the forum were complaining about getting negative comments.

I found negative comments to be some of the most helpful ones (of course there is a difference between being nasty and being helpfully critical).

Thanks for this brilliant post. I shall keep this in mind. I love reading and commenting, but sometimes I feel like I'm missing out on all that Authonomy has to offer (all the stuff that other users are getting) if I don't spend some time on the forum.

Damn the attraction of the forum! Damn it, I say!

JO said...

This is so helpful. As a newcomer to writing and critiquing (is there such a verb?0 I am, no doubt, guilty of comments that are too general. I try to say something - if only to assure writers that someone has dropped by to read their work.
Now I have copied onto a separate document and have a framework to refer to when thinking about someone's work. Thanks again, jo

Winterman said...

I think there are those who will game the system but, on the whole, the authors of those works will tend to be the weakest and so the artificial inflation of their MSs will ultimately do them no good.

Personally I only write reader reviews, which I believe to be distinct from critiques. If I read the first few chapters and the book is something feel I would buy if I found it on a real world bookstore shelf, then I say so and encourage others to sample the work.

If it's something I don't like or find amateurish, I keep mum.

Luckily, so far, the general calibre of writing has proven to be pretty damned stellar.

DON'T FORGET YOUR LUCKY PANTS should already have a contract, in my opinion. It's a YA comedy, written by someone I've never met and have no knowledge of beyond her gift for story telling.

Check it out.

Anonymous said...

Some interesting comments, Jason.
"Friendship ponzi schemes" had me laughing out loud. What on Earth do you mean?
I always feel guilty if someone had posted say 25,000 words and I only read 10,000. What if what I have to say is addressed or contradicted in the part I haven't read? So I end up saying I read through Chapter Five or whatever and can imagine the author's annoyance.

Jason Pettus said...

"Friendship ponzi scheme" = "I'll put your title on my bookshelf/watchlist if you put mine on yours," or the act of convincing a hundred existing fans of your book to join authonomy just to vote for it, etc etc. I don't have an official opinion on it myself, but it's certainly a hot topic in the forums, of whether these kinds of technical loopholes constitute a "gaming of the system."

In answer to your question, I think it's crucial to state right at the beginning of reviews here how much of it you read; I don't think there's anything wrong at all with reading just a few thousand words of a title here, given that this is all essentially volunteer work each of us are putting in, but I think it's important for understanding your thoughts that everyone knows you only read a few thousand words. Sometimes I read entire novels here, sometimes only ten pages, and I don't mind giving comments in any of those situations; but I do make it clear what limitations or strengths I bring to my comments, based on how much I did get through.

John said...

Jason, you have put your finger on the only complaint I have about Authonomy: that we are all, including me, distracted by the rating system. Time is wasted with all sorts of schemes to get on a bookshelf or watchlist instead of feeling comfortable with spending the time to read another person's book carefully enough to give a conscientious critique.
I have suggested four or five times in the forums that the problem could be simply solved by keeping the rankings confidential, with an announcement of the top 5 at the end of the month. It seems to be the proverbial lead balloon.

Anonymous said...

I suppose the design of the system is bound to make writers keenly watch their place in the ranks. Looking at other people's work can be huge fun as well though - just need more hours in the day!

Dee said...

I started out very naively on Authonomy, (and I think my naivety ranking is somewhere around 500 at the moment)and just started out by reading, reading and reading. Then critiquing, but with slight reluctance because I kept thinking to myself, "How dare I? Who do I think I am?" but soon learned, and now your article confirms, that's exactly what I'm supposed to do! Now I've moved on to the next stage and my books on, so I'm receiving critiques and it's great! More Please!
Just thinking what a wonderful invention this is, Authonomy!

Stretcher said...

Maybe not definitive but between the lines the people on this site are being politely told off. The 'FPS' (Friendship Ponzi etc) is the site's downfall and leads to a clique-i-ness (?) which many dislike, even setting up alternative threads to complain. Judging by the response there is almost a political divide. Very human.
Most comments are already made somewhere on the forum. Nobody in normal employment can read and fairly review the sheer bulk of reading presented. If this is a reminder to writers of the size of agents' and publishers' slush piles then well done but hardly encouraging. There is another site like this elsewhere where writers must first review to be reviewed and pieces, across genres, are assigned. Bogging down in forums is still available for the chat junkies but no points for networking, only natural common ground and arguments arise. For one example a 'newbie'- very USA - here on HCA, will put up, upload their beloved work and maybe not enjoy the ensuing critique. Send out scouts - a small piece you are sitting on waiting for the time and encouragement to expand. 10,000 words? Just put 2-3000 and fill up the rest with lorem ipsum etc from the powerpoint sample slides. See how many comments you get here (zero, I bet) Do the same on 'elsewhere site' and the dogs of war will pounce on it and give it a good critiquing. Keep your magnum opus - which anyway is supposed to be cooling in the baking tray drawer - and use what is learnt from the disembowelment of the unready and guess what? Revise and edit. So, I've learnt something in this process, but I feel like I've surrendered quite a lot of valuable time. Maybe I should have sent off a cheque and had my stuff read by someone in the know. Damn! They're subjective as well...must not forget Stretcher

Keith Sheppard said...

I've never really understood all this stuff about negative comments because, in my experience, it's usually the opposite problem in Authonomy. I suspect most critiquers are simply too nice to be really critical. I think everyone who has left comments on my book has said they like it, maybe with a few constructive suggestions. That's very nice and heartwarming but I sometimes wonder how many have looked and moved on (what have I let myself in for, saying that?).

I know I do this myself. I sometimes (not very often) read something which makes me think, oh dear, this is dreadful. Like another contributor here, I just move on to something else. Should I be writing to that author and saying "don't give up the day job"?

I suspect I'm not overly good at the arty part of critiquing and many of my crits comprise comprehensive lists of typos and grammatical mistakes I've noticed on the way through. I generally find authors grateful for this but I wonder whether it's genuinely critiquing or a copy editing service.

Mysteron said...

The Mind-boggling cynicism of Harper Collins.

The spokesperson for HC on Authonomy is some IT functionary called Rik who uses a God avatar - he ought to feature in Channel 4's "IT Crowd".

Get a load of this communication from Rik:

"no it just means that the editors desk isn't the only route to getting your book read.

Quite a few people have been contacted, some were at the top of the charts, some in the middle, and some lower down.
It doesn't really matter, if your pitch is attractive and your book is of interest to the editor who is looking."

Have you worked it out yet? Can you see the cynicism? OK, let me spell it out. Rik's message says that everyone has a chance of having their book looked at no matter their position in the chart. He can't afford to say it too loudly because it would sabotage all of those monthly strenuous efforts to reach the top 5, and remove the dubious honour of reaching the editor's desk. So, it gets smuggled in instead. No formal announcement. But still the word gets out there.

People who are nowhere near the top of the chart suddenly have hope, and decide to stay on Authonomy. This, of course, is the whole point. If people realise they have no realistic chance of reaching the top 5, many will give up and leave Authonomy. To prevent this, it is necessary to provide "hope" to everyone, hence HC's little stratagem - note that it hasn't actually led to anything for anyone.

Apparently, 12 people have been asked for their permission for their pitches to be used. Given that Authonomy is a public site, owned and controlled by HC, and to which HC editors and any agents have unrestricted access, you have to ask yourself why they've bothered to email these people. Why do they need permission? They don't, of course.

Wise up to corporate marketing. Authonomy is already on its last legs. The top 5 selections are a regular disaster, people are already leaving or talking of leaving. HC are itching to introduce advertising to make some money from Authonomy. It's a mess. Do yourself a favour: leave and get on with proper writing. Maybe you can get a Vatican ban for a self-published book - like me.

Who needs HC? Who needs Authonomy? Try being creative on your own terms. Don't follow the herd, and don't treat Rik like God. He's just another member of the IT crowd. And the boss of HC is Rupert Murdoch. Know what I mean?

Dee said...

whoo wee, Mysteron! That could as well have been a personal message in response to my comment: a lesson in authonomyology! I don't feel so naive now (naivety rating around hmmm top 5 certainly).
Why have you bothered to look on the site, find the article and spend so much valuable writing time damming the thing you're commenting on? Or, excuse my grammar, upon which you are commenting?
What has upset you like that?
So we are all like pons, as we all are in this Huge Corporate-run world anyway, are we? Living off artificial means while donating spare change to the Rspca?
I think I'll go back to my comfortable naivety. But remain far more sceptical now. Hmmm, naivety rating now 150 (-101).

Winterman said...

I'll say it here as I've done before.

The only difference between the AUTHONOMY slush pile and any other is that this one is visible.

It takes a certain amount of ego for someone to decide they should be paid to tell stories but that ego has to have a certain shape as well.

You have have a healthy respect for the notion that you might actually suck, no matter what your parents and friends say. There are a few people, not a lot yet, but a few, who seem to think that simply posting a few chapters of their opus on the site guarantees them a nod from HC. When that doesn't happen, they whine.

To those people I say "Grow up."

We are all gladiators here and most of us will end up bloody on the arena floor. Embrace that because that's what it is.

Stop looking for secret cabals and weird top-down conspiracies. They aren't necessary for something like this. Most writers are crap and most editors know it within the first few pages of an MS, if that.

Either HC thinks they can sell your book and you get the nod or they don't and you don't. That's the deal at every publishing house in the world.

Quit whinging and looking for loopholes and shortcuts. Shut up, get writing, knuckle down. If this is the only publisher to which you're submitting, and AUTHONOMY is the only avenue of submission, you've already lost the race.

Seriously. Enough already.

Stretcher said...

I like it when a thread doesn't drift off - one here says HC are a cynical bunch and then another says 'maybe, but I like being naive and why post here if you don't like it?' (It is because he too is a writer and feels the need to be heard, dear) If the IT demon tells promotional lies that there is a behind the scenes scouring of the lower ranks how do you know the truth? Like doing the lottery you have to be in it...etc. 14 million to one against but? HC is another string to your bow plus you may virtually meet like minded OK people you won't normally meet at the sad little keyboard here in front of me...oh dear! I do think some have settled and now roost here but when you do a critique how often do you find people making a mistake which sends you back to your own ooops-es? I would like an answer to the conundrum that a writer (who is naturally a reader, and therefore capable of constructive criticism), cannot critique his/her own work without weeks of hindsight in the way. Ego? Your ego sees the published and says 'I can write better than that' We have a cynical IT schizoid inside us do we? The cynical poster above is obviously resigned that he will not get on HC’s list and: many on the site suck up in a deplorable unashamed way. Imaginary HC conversation: It’s a nice story – we can sell this. – No! He was rude and cynical about us on the Authonomy blog / forum. – Now, this twee dull rubbish with the typos – they sucked up big time. We go with them. Or nobody.

VisionScript said...

Thanks for screwing my head back on straight. Like Anne Lyken-Garner, I didn't know you blogged here and just earlier sent you a message thinking you were just someone who loved books and lived in Chicago, close to Barack Obama.

I'm new here and telling myself not to be caught in the game, but to improve my work and hopefully help others do the same. But I felt myself being tugged into the game, an anxiousness to see better numbers. So, thank you for the heads up.

Passiontide said...

Jasonpettus salut.You seem to have acquired the reputation of the Authonomy sage, possibly due to confident opinions, possibly length of diligent reviews, maybe both. Found your guidelines helpful (in terms of assisting clarity in evaluation) but I think you ignore the central stumbling block which determines almost everything both on this site and in the world of books; that is what I would call 'reader disposition'.I find that I have opened many would be books on Au'my which although competently written I find boring in subject or character or situation.This is my baggage but if i ignored the fact that I carry it, it would skew any opinion I might offer. The same goes for those who dislike imagery, discursive conversation, fantasy, whatever. Would it not be more helpful if a reviewer initially admitted their own tastes, so that a writer could discern what if anything could be considered 'objective'? It seems to me that the books that rise in the charts here are those that seem potentially publishable because they conform to the existing established market. I hoped that Authonomy would provide a forum to extend and elasticise the market by providing an opportunity for wider tastes, and diverse originality. Given the seeming obsession with the rankings this will never happen, and any approach to a writer is immediatly suspected of self interest (subtext 'please read mine now!) Keeping rankings hidden would remove this at a stroke, and might then economise by leading to natural affiliations of readers with similar tastes recommending not their own but the work of others, and undertaking the kind of reviews that would be genuinely helpful because motivated by a wish to help what you are already drawn to- get even better. Having provided a months of attentive reading on a weighty tome and eight pages of commentary on one book here, for which I got thanks a bunch but not even a look at mine in response I realise that my writing will be killed unless there is a more discerning way to help others in the hope of being similarly helped myself.There simply isn't time to find the occasiuonal jewel except through likely friends, or finding such friends unless self interest is eliminated. Given all those things your guidelines would prove most helpful!

TobyC said...

Thanks for sharing a worthwhile critique format. It provides a solid starting point for looking at works on Authonomy, especially when one is outside a normal area of interest.

Jason Pettus said...

Back from Thanksgiving, and am looking tonight at many of these comments for the first time...

John: I'm actually one of the people who encourages the continued public ratings of titles and reviewers here; because I kind of -like- some of this competitive element, and is a legitimate part of the fun I have by being an active member here. Like you, though, I agree whole-heartedly that little schemes and the like are not the way to do this, and not a good use of an author's time here.

VisionScript: A friend of mine here in Chicago who I visit a lot lives less than a mile from Obama! It's crazy in her neighborhood these days, I'm telling you.

Passiontide: That's what I actually meant by people having sometimes wildly different definitions for the three pillars of Western narrative fiction (story, character and style); it's the same thing as the "reader disposition" you mention. I agree with you that a critic owes it to their audience to help them understand their own slants and biases; but it's also a writer's job to go seek this information out about critics, in order to get the most out of those critiques being written.

Also, in regards to what your original hopes for authonomy had been (and remember that I do not work for HarperCollins or authonomy, and do not officially speak for them in any way here, only for myself as a member); I think it's important to remember that it is a mainstream corporate entity that runs and benefits from this site, and that it is often multi-million-dollar projects they are launching when signing a particular book. Under such circumstances, I think it's perfectly fair that authonomy be geared as it is (and I agree with you, it is) towards finding and championing commercially viable, maybe even sometimes "conformist" literature. That said, also remember that plenty of unique, challenging, and quirky hits find their way into the mainstream every year as well; HC alone, for example, in the last year has published Gregory Maguire, Neal Stephenson, Richard Dawkins and Janet Evanovich, all authors I consider pretty smart and outside the norm. There's room within such a system for unusual books of extra-high quality, which I do think you see every so often here as well.

And to all the people who in one way or another have complained now about the sheer volume of unsigned manuscripts here, it makes me laugh that you would even bring this up as an issue. That's the very definition of the arts in general, and has been for a long time -- every year a million new books get written, and with the average person only having time for maybe 20 to 200 of those a year, and with therefore a whole lot of competition over those people's attention, and with there simply being a whole lot of losers of that competition and very few winners. That's true no matter where in literature you turn; I don't understand why anyone would complain about it simply being true at authonomy too.

Airborn Press / Gordon Long said...

Responses to this strand seem to fall into two areas: the original idea, which is how to write a critique, and the usual discussion about what Authonomy is, and what it is doing.

In answer to the second, people like Mysteron and Passiontide, is that, by definition, Authonomy is going to be a reflection of the industry as it is, and the whole competition, commercialization thing is going to be there. I never expected any different, so I'm not upset when I see it happening. What I'm hoping for is some small movement in the direction of modernization, towards what the publishing industry might become once it catches up with the web. The reason I'm here is to watch what happens, to see if I can be there when it does.

In reaction to the original post, I remind everyone that critiquing is a skill, just like writing, and fewer people have it naturally, or have much training in it.

In my experience, when you pinpoint a problem, then suggest some solutions which do not include rewriting the passage yourself, you have done the writer a favour. If, as some have suggested, you reveal any personal biases up front, it also helps.